Return to Me by: Audrey

~Very well thought out story. Ending was rushed, however, the poem finished it very well. -Kati N.

~ Overall, this is an sweet, endearing story, but there are a few little criticisms that I'd like to make- 1, since this is fanfic, you don't really need to explain who the characters are, etc, because that's already been established.  2- The plot, Hermione/Ron, it's all a little cliche'. Try to put a little plot twist in there, some action... you know. Cake's kind of plain with just bread and icing, put in some sprinkles!.  Great job, though, you are very good with the "flow" of the story- it's very well spaced, nothing happens too fast, and you know how to add descriptions so it's not bland. Keep writing! -Alyssa